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Re: Picture Perfect: Chapter One
My grandma's eyes crinkled as she laughed a sound that rippled off of the walls and filled the room. Her hazel eyes sparkled and she smiled at me, her teeth ...
Jul 10, 2010 -
Re: Soulless, Chapter 1
Hi ^-^. Review time! Characters: Em: I want to kill her. She seems like an annoying little... I mean, she's a meaniehead and hot tempered -_^. If she was real ...
Jul 8, 2010 -
Re: Plato's Cave
I am no poet or fan of poetry, but I know I received many images from this piece. Whether they were what you wanted me to see, we may never ...
Jul 8, 2010 -
Re: Trust~Chapter 1
First I just wanna say that I like your avatar. ^-^. Anyway, just from looking at this it's a bit short for a chapter. Things are so much shorter when ...
Jul 8, 2010 -
Re: Introduction
Ignore Card over there. Very good piece of description you have there. I can see this happening myself. I just wish I had a better Idea of the time period... ...
Jul 8, 2010 -
Re: My worst fear.
I couldn't sleep very well last night, no, more like someone put rock in bed in? I think you mean under, like that fairy tail. also, it's under the mattress, ...
Jul 8, 2010 -
Re: In Between
Though I do agree with Silented1 that it is hard to figure out exactly what you are talking about, but who cares? If you go through line by line it ...
Jun 11, 2010 -
Re: 3rd times the charm
I agree with Kingolions that this poem is, in fact, short and sweet. I do feel like you have no pattern whatsoever; you might as well remove the line breaks ...
Jun 11, 2010 -
Re: No One Can Replace
Very well written and good words, but I do not totally understand your punctuation. Maybe it's just because I am more of a novelist and not much of a poet... ...
Jun 11, 2010 -
Re: Hello, my name is (Prolouge)
Hello ^-^. I am Otaku and I'll be your reviewer for the day ^-^. To get started, I'll read through and edit in my thoughts (what I commented on is ...
Feb 9, 2010 -
Re: Gun&Blood Chapter 1 ( Fixed Version )
Hi ^-^! I'm Otaku and I'll be your reviewer for today. The below spoiler is my thoughts on your work as I read. Sun has already passed this city, leaving ...
Jan 7, 2010 -
Re: Adjusting to the Dark- Chapter 1 (1st draft)
Wow it's been a while. This is my first YWS review in a long, long time, so please be a bit lenient of my reviewing style if it's not up ...
Jan 7, 2010 -
Re: Escape From Atlanta (Prologue)
Fights, death, and blood. All of these words have something in common and all depend on each other. If there's a fight there going to be death, and if there's ...
Apr 25, 2009 -
Re: Breath of Blood
well, im here, and it is time to get to work... The Breath of Blood The hushed footsteps of the Wizard (if you want it capitalized, then capitalise the word ...
Mar 29, 2009 -
Re: Victim Number Eight
sorry i wasnt able to do a edit for you; my PC freaked when i was right in the middle. to make up, here is a list of your most ...
Oct 4, 2008
